Please see the professor’s comments below on the draft you did for me about a week ago. I need for you to update the assignment and resubmit. I’ve attached the paper you gave me. Thanks!
“Edwin, great draft but it needs some work. There should be an introduction with a thesis before the problem section of the paper. Your thesis needs work and that is very important. Don’t describe what you do, give the information in the thesis. You have a lot of writing errors. I highlighted several in the beginning. You should have someone proofread or go to the tutors for editing. In general a good draft. Barbara”