modify my biography based on comments

Here is comment:Grammar/Spelling: It is fine that you wrote completely in first person “I”. However, it seems that you have overused the “I”. See if you can say the same thing without saying I this and I that over and over again. General Content: I like the general content of your bio and statement.Many sentences are a bit confusing to understand although I “think” I get your intentions.

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